Wednesday, November 16, 2016

Home assignment on session 7



In less than 90 words, reflect on the following topic:
What tourists enjoy visiting in Egypt.
Note: relevance, coherence and unity are necessary while writing your paragraph.
After writing this paragraph, answer the following questions:
1.How much did you know about the subject before we started?
2.What problems did you encounter while you were writing this paragraph?
3.In what ways d o you think you need to improve?

4.What’s the most important thing you learned today? 

Tuesday, November 15, 2016

Exercise on session 7



Exercise: Analyzing Unity

Read the following process paragraph. Underline the sentence that does not belong.

 Cleaning your room

1  Cleaning your room is not difficult if you follow some simple
guidelines.  2  First, you must pick up all of your clothes off the floor. 3  Then you need to decide which clothes are dirty and which clothes are clean and put them in their appropriate places.  4  It is important to wash your clothes with good-quality laundry detergent to keep them looking neat and clean.  5  After that, you should put away any items that are out of place.  6  The next step is to dust all of your furniture, such as your nightstand or dresser.  7  The final step is to mop or vacuum the floor, depending on its surface.  8  Once you have finished these steps, you can relax as you think about your good work. You can use a purpose statement to help establish your purpose and to help establish unity. You can also check to see whether each sentence follows the writer’s purpose statement: “The purpose of this paragraph is to explain how to clean your room.

vedio about "unity & coherance"





session 7 "Paragraph Unity , Coherance and Development"



 (1) (a)Unity:
Unity means “oneness”. All paragraphs should have unity, that is they should only   discuss one idea.  If you have more than one idea, start a new paragraph. Unity refers to the extent to which all of the ideas contained within a given paragraph "hang together" in a way that is easy for the reader to understand. Paragraph unity is the most important characteristic of a good paragraph. By unity, we mean that all sentences in a paragraph should speak about one single idea or one main subject. That is to say the topic sentence, the supporting details, and the concluding sentence should focus on only one idea. In other words, unity in a paragraph means that the entire paragraph should focus on one single idea. The supporting details should explain the main idea. The concluding sentence should end the paragraph with the same idea. Thus, a unified paragraph presents a thought, supports it with adequate details and completes it with a conclusion.
 Unity in a paragraph means that the entire paragraph should focus on one single idea. The supporting details should explain the main idea. The concluding sentence should end the paragraph with the same idea. Thus, a unified paragraph presents a thought, supports it with adequate details and completes it with a conclusion. If your paragraph contains a sentence or some sentences that are NOT related to the main topic, then we say that the paragraph "lacks unity," or that the sentence is "off-topic."
Unity in a paragraph begins with the topic sentence. Every paragraph has one single, controlling idea that is expressed in its topic sentence, which is typically the first sentence of the paragraph. A paragraph is unified around this main idea, with the supporting sentences providing detail and discussion. In order to write a good topic sentence, think about your theme and all the points you want to make. Decide which point drives the rest, and then write it as your topic sentence.
 (b)The importance of unity in writing a paragraph:
Unity is important because it aids the reader in following along with the writer's ideas. The reader can expect that a given paragraph will deal only with one main topic. Then we can say that, a unified paragraph must follow the idea mentioned in the topic sentence and must not deviate from it. A paragraph is unified when all of its sentences relate directly to its topic sentence.

  2-(a) Coherence:

      Coherence refers to the extent to which the flow of ideas in a paragraph is easily understood by the reader. For this reason, coherence is closely related to unity. Coherence means establishing a relationship between the ideas presented in a paragraph. It brings about a rationale in the arrangement of the ideas which are introduced either in the chronological order or in the order of importance. When a writer changes main ideas or topics within a paragraph, confusion often results. To achieve coherence, then, a writer should show how all of the ideas contained in a paragraph are relevant to the main topic.
Coherence is product of many different factors, which combine to make every paragraph, every sentence, and every phrase contribute to the meaning of the whole piece. Coherence refers to a certain characteristic or aspect of writing. The word coherence   comes from the  (verb) cohere which means  to “stick together” . Sentences         in       a  paragraph should flow smoothly and       logically.   Coherence in writing means that all the ideas in a paragraph flow smoothly from one sentence to the next sentence. With coherence, the reader has an easy time understanding the ideas that you wish to express.
Coherence is the quality that makes your writing understandable. Sentences within a paragraph need to connect to each other and work together as a whole. One of the best ways to achieve coherency is to use transition words. These words create bridges from one sentence to the next. You can use transition words that show order (first, second, third); spatial relationships (above, below) or logic (furthermore, in addition, in fact). Also, in writing a paragraph, using a consistent verb tense and point of view are important ingredients for coherency.
A paragraph is coherent when all of its sentences are written clearly, logically, and in a manner that is easy to follow. A coherent paragraph has sentences that all logically follow each other; they are not isolated thoughts. Coherence can be achieved in several ways. First, using transitions helps connect ideas from one sentence to the next. Second, ordering thoughts in numerical sequence helps to direct the reader from one point to the next. Third, structuring each paragraph according to one of the following patterns helps to organize sentences: general to particular; particular to general; whole to parts; question to answer; or effect to cause. 
An effective paragraph might look like this:
It is commonly recognized that dogs have an extreme antagonism toward cats. This enmity between these two species can be traced back to the time of the early Egyptian dynasties. Archaeologists in recent years have discovered Egyptian texts in which there are detailed accounts of canines brutally mauling felines. Today this type of cruelty between these two domestic pets can be witnessed in regions as close as your own neighborhood. For example, when dogs are walked by their masters (and they happen to catch sight of a stray cat), they will pull with all their strength on their leash until the master is forced to yield; the typical result is that a feline is chased up a tree. The hatred between dogs and cats has lasted for many centuries, so it is unlikely that this conflict will ever end.

This paragraph is effective for the following reasons:
1.          The paragraph shows unity. All the sentences effectively relate back to the topic sentence at the beginning of the paragraph. 
2.          The paragraph shows coherence. There is a flow of thoughts and ideas among the sentences in this paragraph. There are good transitions employed in the paragraph. The writer also presents her sub-topics in an orderly fashion that the reader can follow easily.
3.          The paragraph is developed. The writer gives herself enough space to develop the topic. She gives us at least two reasons to accept her argument and incorporates some examples in order to give those reasons more validity.
(b) What are the methods of incorporating coherence in writing a paragraph?
Below are some ways you can make a paragraph  become coherent:
1.Arrange ideas in a logical order.
2.Use linking words
3-Use transitional words or phrases. Many words can be used to help readers from one sentence to the next without being jarring. Think about the relationships between your sentences and insert words or phrases to help them move along.
4-Repeat key terms or phrases  or nouns regularly.
If you are trying to convince your readers of something, the power of repetition can be a great tool. You don’t want to over do it, but repeating certain key terms or phrases in the right places can greatly assist an essay’s coherence. The parts to repeat can be in reference to the subject of the essay, or in reference to the main point of the essay too.
Example:
Television is drowning most of our society’s ability to think creatively. Its too easy to go home after work or school and let the TV wash over us like some digital pacifier. Our thoughts are no longer creative, they are just passive. We don’t have to think about which housewife to hate since we’re pretty much told it by the television show’s writers.
note: to avoid sounding repetitive, try using synonyms as well. Synonyms are different words that mean the same thing. Using synonyms can help in repeating ideas without sounding annoying.
Example:
Movies have gotten out of control. The whole cinema industry seems to be spiral-ling downwards. Films cost far too much to make and too much to see. As a student, I don’t even the last time I could afford a night at the silver screen without sacrificing dinner out.
5- Use nouns and pronouns appropriately
Using words like that, this, those, these, he, she, and it  is a very easy way to help readers along in an essay. Pronouns refer back to something previously mentioned, so they add to an essays coherence. Just make sure that people know what you are referring back to.
Example:
Is advertising a legitimate, harmless vehicle that stimulates commerce, or has it become a force out of control, inundating our lives and culture with ill intended messages?
Does the problem possibly lie somewhere in between: Is it a legitimate tool that is some-times taken advantage of? These are all questions we should be asking ourselves about the ads we see every day.
3- (a) Development:
A paragraph is well-developed when the writer has given sufficient information to make the reader feel the topic sentence has been sufficiently discussed. Don't ever assume that the reader can read your mind: be specific enough to develop your ideas thoroughly, but avoid repetition. Remember that a paragraph should have enough sentences so that the main idea of the topic sentence is completely developed. Generalizations should be supported with examples or illustrations. Also, details and descriptions help the reader to understand what you mean.
b- what are the methods of incorporating development in writing a paragraph?
note: make sure that all methods directly support the subject and main point of your essay.  
1-examples/illustrations:•         develop an idea with specific and concrete examples.
2-narration:•           tell a relevant story or anecdote
3-description:•        paint a picture for your reader using specific and concrete details.
4-process:•    describe how something works.
5-compare and contrast:•          point out similarities /differences.
6-analogy:•   compare a difficult idea/concept with something the reader will more easily under-stand
7-cause and effect:•  show the result of an action, or an action that leads to a result.
8-classification/division: •       distinguish between types or classes
9-definition:•          explain a difficult term or concept in your own words
note: An important part of developing argumentative essays comes from your own back-ground, ideology, life, etc.
 10-personal insight/ analysis:•           in your own words, show the relevance and/or rationale for information included, or even for your argument itself. If you include support, data, and/or examples
from outside sources, explain why they are relevant to your claim. Don’t assume that your readers can see their relevance, explain it to them. Everyone has different ideas for why things are -- it is your job as the writer to show your readers your ideas.
Two  examples of paragraphs  to show unity and coherence:
1-THE HUMAN BODY
(1) The human body is a wonderful piece of work that nature has created. (2) It is not beautiful like the body of a butterfly or peacock but it is shaped practically. (3) It can do many types of work which other animals cannot. (4) It is not strong like the body of a tiger. (5) But in place of physical strength it has a big and sharp brain. (6) By using this brain the human physique has been able to overcome many of its limitations. (7) By sitting in an aeroplane it flies faster than a kite, by riding a motorcycle it travels faster than a leopard, and by firing a machine gun it fights much better than a tiger. (8)In spite of all this, the human body suffers from many diseases because it has a weakness for habits such as smoking, drinking and overeating. (9) When it is healthy the body can give great pleasure but when it is sick it can cause great pain. (10) The wise man would always keep his body fit because a healthy mind can work only in a healthy body.
The first sentence states the main idea of the paragraph and claims the superiority of the human body over the rest of the creation. It enables the reader to expect the following ideas in the paragraph that explain and illustrate the qualities and attributes of the human body.
The second, third, fourth, fifth, sixth, and seventh sentences compare, contrast, elucidate and justify the main idea or topic sentence. They establish the main theme with logical explanations and transitions. They create a graphic picture in the minds of the reader with suitable and appropriate language expressions. In brief, they develop the main idea of the paragraph.
The eighth and the ninth sentences interpret and analyze the limitations of the human body and prove the strength of the topic sentence. They, further, lead the main idea into a concluding thought.
Finally, the tenth sentence concludes with the idea that the human body should be well preserved for a proper functioning of the system and that a healthy mind can work only in a healthy body.
Thus the paragraph, The Human Body, is a unified and coherent paragraph.
2-What to do to get good grades:
To get good grades in classes, I need to plan to do three things. First of all, listening carefully to the teacher in class makes me understand the lesson. If I listen carefully to what the teacher says, I can ask questions about things that I don’t understand. I can also do the right homework that the teacher assigned. Second, doing my
homework every day makes me review the lesson from class. The homework helps me to practice many things from class. I can also find questions in the homework to ask the teacher that will make my English better. Third, making an effort to study gives me the will to learn. If I don’t make an effort, I will be lazy. The will to learn makes me try to finish the homework first, and then I will let myself go out with my friends. Finally, I try to make a plan to get a good grade in class, and I will abide by it.

Notice:
The Red topic sentence is echoed (but not repeated) in the red concluding sentence.
The three green sentences introduce an idea (listening) and then gives more information about that idea.
The three blue sentences introduce a second idea (homework) and then gives more information about that idea.
The three pink sentences introduce a third idea (making the effort to study) and then gives more information about that idea.
Notice the use of the transitions “first of all”, “second,” “third”, and “Finally.”
This paragraph is a good example because it responds to the prompt in first person, the details are thoughtful and personal, and it follows the structure I’ve taught you very well. I slightly changed the topic sentence to make it connect better to the supporting sentence. I have also made some grammatical/vocab corrections so that you can focus on content and structure when you read.

model answer for session 6


Wednesday, November 9, 2016

Home assignment



Exercises (1)- Write a topic sentence for each paragraph. Make sure your topic sentence expresses the main idea of the paragraph.
Example: Miami is the perfect place to take a vacation. It is always sunny and warm. The beaches are gorgeous, with soft white sand and beautiful water. There are many fine restaurants in the Miami area, and most of the hotels offer terrific entertainment nightly.
It’s no wonder that Miami is my first choice for a vacation destination.
1.) ___________________________________________________ . He has collected stamps and coins ever since he was a child. He is very proud of his valuable collections. Paul also enjoys painting and drawing. Recently he has become interested in gardening. Out of all his hobbies, Paul’s favourite one is reading. He usually reads at least one book every week. Paul keeps busy with all of his hobbies.
2.) _________________________________________________ . I can’t wait to come home from school and eat the delicious meals she has prepared. She is famous for her desserts like peach pie and chocolate soufflé. She is always experimenting with new recipes and trying different ingredients. No one in the world can cook the way my mother does.
3.) __________________________________________________ . First and most importantly, the work is very interesting. I learn new things every day and I get to travel a lot. In addition, my boss is very nice. She is always willing to help me when I have a problem. I have also made many new friends at my job. Last, but not least, the salary is fantastic.
4.) ____________________________________________________ . To start things off, my plane was six hours late. When I finally got to my hotel, I was very disappointed. It was small and dirty. On the third day, my wallet was stolen, and I lost all my credit cards. It rained very day except one, and on that day I got a terrible sunburn. All in all, it wasn’t a vacation to remember.
Exercises (2)- Relevance of Ideas Exercise
       In the following paragraph, one or more of the sentences may be irrelevant. Read through the paragraph and decide what sentences you would get rid of.
      
Exercise is really good for one’s physical and mental health. It is proven that aerobic exercise is good for the heart, which is very important to overall health. I used to run every day, but now I go to dance classes to get my aerobic exercise. Strength training is important for maintaining muscle mass and improving bone density. Both muscle mass and bone density can decrease as we age, so improving them through strength training is important. My grandmother broke a hip last year because her bones were so fragile. All kinds of exercise have been shown to relieve depression, anxiety, and stress.

Tuesday, November 8, 2016

Exercises



Identify the sentence which is not relevant.Exercises (1)-
  Instruction
 Read each paragraph then identify the sentence which is not relevant. Write the number of the irrelevant sentence on the blank.
Gap-fill exercise
(1) 1. One very important use of light is to enable us to see the things around us. 2. With the presence of light, we can see our way as we move from one place to another. 3. We do not stumble. 4. We are able to read books and see clearly all the things around us. 5. A book is a very important source of information. 6. Can you imagine living in a world without light?  (...........) 
(2) 1. The basketball championship game was ongoing. 2. Mr. de Vera and his children were watching the game on the television set when all of a sudden, puff! 3. The lights went out. 4. My favorite team was leading the game! 5. There was a commotion in the sala. 6. Little Paolo was frightened and cried out loud.
(...........)
(3)1.It was dark and cloudy outside one early morning. 2. Rain started to fall and soon the wind began to blow. 3. Mother turned on the radio. 4. The announcer said that a typhoon is hoisted over the Metro Manila area. 5. Classes are suspended in the elementary and high school levels so she decided not to wake the children. 6. Mother went to the market yesterday morning. (...........)
(4)1. After supper, Mikee and Chimmie started to work on their assignments. 2. Mikee and Chimmie go to the same school. 3. Chimmie seemed to find difficulty in answering some Math problems in her book. 4. She wanted to ask her sister but she was also busy. 5.So, she approached her father instead and asked him to help her.
(...........)
(5)1. Michael was playing with his friends when his mother called out from the garden. 2. He came running with a ball tucked under his arm. 3. His father gave him the ball on his birthday. 4. Mother asked him to help her water the plants. 5. Michael placed the ball near the pot of a plant. 6. He got the sprinkler near the faucet and started watering the plants.  (...........)
Exercise (2)- TOPIC SENTENCE exercises:
Choose the best topic sentence for each group of supporting sentences. Write it on the line provided. Here is an example:
Example: ___________b_____________. I usually go skiing every weekend in the winter even though it is expensive. I love the feeling of flying down a mountain. The views are beautiful from the top of a mountain and along the trails. Even the danger of falling and getting hurt can’t keep me away from the slopes on a winter day.
a) Skiing is expensive.
b) Skiing is my favourite sport.
c) Skiing is dangerous.
 1.) _________________________________________________. North Americans send cards for many occasions. They send cards to family and friends on birthdays and holidays. They also send thank-you cards, get well cards, graduation cards, and congratulation cards. It is very common to buy cards in stores and send them through the mail, but turning on the computer and sending cards over the Internet is also popular.
a) Sending cards is very popular in North America.
b) Birthday cards are the most popular kind of card.
c) It is important to send thank-you cards.
2.) _____________________________________________ . I enjoy summer sports like water skiing and baseball. The weather is usually sunny and hot, so I can go to the beach almost every day. Gardening is my hobby and I spend many summer days working in my garden. Unfortunately, the days pass too quickly in summer.
a) I like to garden in summer.
b) Summer is my favourite season.
c) Summer is to short.
3.) _________________________________________ . For example, a person can have breakfast in New York, board an airplane, and have dinner in Paris. A businesswoman in London can instantly place an order with a factory in Hong Kong by sending a fax. Furthermore, a schoolboy in Tokyo can turn on a TV and watch a baseball game being played in Los Angeles.
a) Airplanes have changed our lives.
b) Advances in technology have made the world seem smaller.
c) The fax machine was an important invention.
4.) ___________________________________________ . One thing you must consider is the quality of the university’s educational program. You also need to think about the school’s size and location. Finally, you must be sure to consider the university’s tuition to make sure you can afford to go to school there.
a) It is expensive to attend a university in the United States.
b) There are several factors to consider when you choose a university to attend.
c) You should consider getting a good education.